The idea is lovely. The punctuation and grammar, not so much. Very creative, especially the alive coffee. You have quite a bit of potential. As for the characteristics; not so much. I think 'shannyfish' is a great believer in this, a lot of people tend to portray the characters as 'teenagers'. It makes readers such as I, feel that they are out of character. Never the less if you fixed some up, it would be a lovely story. =D Good Work. *salute*
haha absolutely wonderful xD you had me bursting out laughing at the randomest bits lol, well done, 5 stars!!
haha! awesome fic! xx
best part: It was Sam “You know what Daniel called me back in for? He got drunk and thought his coffee was alive, I’ll be back in about 10 minutes”
anyways.. :P great job.!
lol...this is such a funny story!!! i can't stop laughing! will there be a sequel to this funny story?
Author's Response: im glad you like it! i might do a sequel i don't know....lol