Yeah um this would be better if you went into more detail and perhaps made this into a MUCH longer fic?
OK.... this just doesn't work. First of all you need to work on your grammar and punctuation. Second of all, where is the story? There isn't enough information to show any development on a plot or anything else. Too little information to even be a drabble.
This is small please write a story it would be amazing
Is this the entire story? It doesn't make much sense to me... What reception? To whom does Sheppard say that Weir's been hurt? Shouldn't he be the one who is supposed to be told what has happened when he was called? As opposed to saying what's going on? Or has he already finished the call? Also, you might want to think about a beta!