Member Since: December 03, 2008
Long-time fanfic writer, I decided to branch out a bit further after I had a REALLY good idea about a John/Elizabeth AU plot; hope everyone likes it.[Report This]
Genres: Action & Adventure, Angst, Drama, Fluff & Slush, General, Humor, Hurt/Comfort, Mystery & Suspense, Romance
Warnings: Abuse, Rape/Non-Consensual, Torture, Violence
Word count: 71302
Summary: Sheppard enters the event horizon after giving Elizabeth his usual boyish smile. She smiles back, not knowing that may be the last time she will see him smile. REPOSTED WITH ADDITIONS AND GRAMMAR CORRECTIONS!!!
Date: January 14, 2009 Title: Chapter 4: Part Four
Now THAT was dark.
It would have been better if you’d spread the paragraphs out a bit more, of course- as it is, your sentences tend to get kind of ‘clumped’ together when they’re being read, making it a bit harder to actually follow what’s going on as easily as I might like-, but that issue aside, the depth of the plot you’ve come up with here is DEFINITELY to be commended.
John’s attempt to cope with the psychological effects of what happened to him are very well-written, while the growing bond between him and Elizabeth as she offers him what support she can to help him through this.
And as for the part where McKay, Teyla and Ford learn what they did to him...
In many ways, I think it was McKay’s reaction that truly reflected how horrified they are at what they did; McKay doesn’t even THINK about freaking out about the fact that he did it with a guy and is solely focusing on the horror of what he did to John.
Admittedly, when this story’s actually meant to take place is a complete mess- Ford’s still around and John’s still a Major, but you mentioned the incident with Colonel Everett as having already taken place-, but given that John had a hard enough time coping with the aftermath as it was, it’s probably for the best that Ronon wasn’t there...
Timeline and writing aside, nice bit of work; keep it up!
Genres: Action & Adventure, Alternate Universe, Angst, Drama, Episode Prologues & Epilogues, Romance
Warnings: Character Death, Violence
Word count: 82309
Summary: During "Before I Sleep", the alternative version of John Sheppard lived as well. (Winner for Best Sheppard/Weir Drama Fic in the 2007 Stargate Fan Awards.)
Date: February 08, 2009 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4
Nice idea, I have to admit; if nothing else, you definitely put a GREAT deal of thought into what life might have been like in Atlantis back when the Ancients ran things.
John and Elizabeth’s various interactions with the Ancients were very well-written, clearly demonstrating the mixture of comradeship and conflict between them and their new allies, due to the Ancients’ willingness to work with them- up to a point, obviously; sending them to the future remained something they wouldn’t do- while some of them initially treat John and Elizabeth like little more than a few lucky Neanderthals that got lucky before they’ve ‘proven’ themselves.
On that topic, it was really rather interesting to see how having TWO people back in the past affected the Ancients here; in the original timeline, Elizabeth on her own didn’t seem to do much- most likely because, as she was alone, she felt less comfortable taking ‘risks’ and leaving no hope for saving her expedition, whereas here she has John to serve as a second voice to encourage her to do more-, but here they not only (Albeit unintentionally) cause the death of more than a couple of Ancients,but leave the survivors with a not-insignificant amount to think about (To say nothing of having the chance to meet such Ancient ‘classics’ as them travelling on the “Aurora” in its prime and John suggesting ‘puddle jumpers’ as a name for the Gateships to the ANCIENTS)...
Interesting touch with Moros actually presenting a decent argument for NOT travelling in time, by the way; if it wasn’t for the fact that John and Elizabeth’s trip could have easily been kept secret from the other Ancients- since they were only going to the FUTURE to try and change things, nobody in the present would be aware of what they’d done-, I might have agreed with him, but as it is they would have, and so I did not (Probably for the best you had Janus’s plans destroyed with that factor in mind, really; the debates that Moros and Elizabeth might have entered into as a result if the plans had survived would have been interesting, but they might have just become tedious fairly quickly).
Admittedly I would have preferred if you’d kept Carson around rather than having him be replaced by Janet in the ‘new’ timeline- and a part of me can’t help but wish you’d left the whole ‘different timeline’ thing alone; at least the original version of “Before I Sleep” suggested that Elizabeth had actually changed the history of HER universe, rather than just creating a new one (Besides, if the Ancients refused to time travel themselves how could they be sure that the ‘alternate timeline’ thing would actually be the case?)-, but that aside, a very intriguing and moving storyline.
And as for the end...
When one John Sheppard and Elizabeth Weir came together as another pair finally ended their long journey through time and space to save Atlantis...
BEAUTIFUL, to say the least.
Author's Response: Wow. Thank you so much for this lovely and long review. It's ones like this that are prizes and gems for writers. ;) First, I'm glad you liked the Ancients and their development/interaction with Elizabeth and John. There was one of the most fun things I did with the fic, along with the world building. Since I didn't have Rodney, Teyla, Ronon or any of the other regular SGA cast to work with, I was forced to either go with Original Characters or the various Ancients scattered throughout the series. It was quite a challenge! Regarding Carson, I could totally understand you sadness to see him gone. Alas, this fic was written before "Sunday," and I surely wouldn't have removed him if it had been written after. I love Carson, always have, and the absence of his character was in no way meant to mean I didn't like him. I just needed to drive home the notion that this verse was not in fact the same original verse that John and Elizabeth were from. Considering the number of things they changed in the past, I didn't see how it would be at all plausible for them to end up in the same exact verse. One thing we've learned from SG-1 is that there is consequences to time-traveling. SG-1 has made many episodes regarding the use of it, all little ARs parallel to the "canon verse" of SG-1. I wanted to play as honest to the verse and it's principals as possible, hence all the differences. ;) Thanks again for the lovely review!
Genres: Crossover, Episode Prologues & Epilogues, Missing Scene, Romance
Word count: 64319
Summary: Everyone has connections to the past, and oftentimes those connections shape the path of the future. An extended and shippified, Sparky, novalization of INTRUDER. First comes JohnElizabeth UST, and then comes the fun that is JohnElizabeth RST.
Date: April 25, 2009 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19
Nice bit of work, to say the least.
You clearly put a great deal of thought into thinking about what all the characters who went back to Earth would get up to during their return home, ranging from thinking about the meetings Elizabeth would have to deal with- both political and personal (Simon, naturally)- to coming up with reasons for John’s absence during the meeting that led to his promotion.
If nothing else, his friendship with Sam was an interesting new touch; might have been rendered AU after Season Four featured no reference, but so far it’s been working out fairly well.
And as for the depth of thought you’ve put into exploring their thoughts about their relationships, with neither wanting to fully acknowledge their feelings even as they can’t help but be aware of their existence…
BRILLIANT work, to say the least; I can DEFINITELY see how their trains of thought on that topic progress.
Plus, of course, I greatly enjoyed the Sam/Daniel elements; after John/Elizabeth, those two have always been my favourite “Stargate” pairing, so I greatly enjoyed the chance for each of them to show their feelings (Even if it’s never explicitly romantic, you recognise their close friendship; that’s the important thing for me, really).
Hope you’re planning to continue; this story is looking VERY interesting!
(Just one last request; if I credited you with the original inspiration, could I use a couple of minor plot details from this story- such as- in my story “The Phantom of Atlantis” to account for some of the expedition’s time on Earth after the Siege?)
Author's Response: Thank you for leaving such a details review. I love it when I recieve reviews that have something to them. Also, it's great to hear another Sam/Daniel shipper is reading this story. We're a rare breed, us Sam and Daniel people, apparently. I am planning on continuing. I actually posted a chapter on ff.net and was supposed to post a more MATURE version over here but my computer crashed and I've been trying to recreate that.
Word count: 39136
Summary: Now Complete!! As John deals with the loss of Elizabeth on Asuras, a routine mission gone wrong reveals an old enemy and a shocking surprise as he finds someone he never thought he would see again.
Date: May 18, 2009 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8: Conflicts
Now THIS is how it SHOULD have been!
Not just because of the John/Elizabeth elements- although those ARE good, I assure you-, but because of the greater emotional depth and exploration that you’re putting into the reunion in the first place; VERY nice bit of work, to say the least.
Her return in “Ghost in the Machine” might have been interesting in terms of the complications caused by the uncertainty of whether it was really her, but here you take a new-yet-similar approach; even if others aren’t certain about Elizabeth, JOHN’S belief in her is unshakeable.
And as for the emotion when that Replicator made John think he’d shot her...
EXCELLENT additional twist, to say the least.
(Interesting little touch with her reaction to Teyla’s pregnancy, on that topic; any chance the implications of that will be analysed in greater detail later?)
Keep up the good work!
Genres: Angst, Drama, Missing Scene
Word count: 12935
Summary: This is a missing scene from ‘The Last Man’. I always wondered why John never asked the digitalized Rodney about Elizabeth, so here’s what would have happened if he did.
Date: March 03, 2009 Title: Chapter 2: Part 02: Not Real
Now THIS looks promising.
I've always thought that the lack of reference to Elizabeth in "Last Man" was essentially the only problem in that episode, so it's good to see this one remedying it (Even if it COULD be in a more encouraging manner; the state Elizabeth's in could be a GREAT deal better...)
Still, here's hoping that HoloMcKay was right and things work out better now than they did in the 'original' timeline, eh?
Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thank you!! I also hated it that 'Last Man' made absolutely no reference what so-ever to Elizabeth.
You'll have to wait and see how it turns out... but if you've read some of my other fics, you'll get an idea ;^)
Genres: Action & Adventure, Angst, Baby!fic, Drama, General, Humor, Hurt/Comfort, Mystery & Suspense
Warnings: Torture, Violence
Series: Fragile Relations
Word count: 13211
Sheppard and his team find a Wraith baby and the bond with her creates an even more bizarre bond when they encounter unexpected guests...
Pre-Ship story with personal moments/dialogues between John and Elizabeth, slowly working towards an even tighter friendship or more... :)
Additional warning: Shep-Whumping
Date: January 05, 2009 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4
OK... now THIS looks like it's going to be interesting!
After all, Atlantis looking after a Wraith infant? To say the long-term consequences are going to be unusual is FAR from being an exaggeration!
Admittedly, I'm slightly let down by the lack of Ronon displayed so far, but given his VERY anti-Wraith status I'm guessing you had your reasons for not including him immediately; just so long as you mention him soon I'm good.
Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thank you and I haven't forgotten about Ronon. He will surely get to say something about this odd situation. My beta's are processing the next chapter, it will be up soon (hopefully)
Genres: Action & Adventure, Baby!fic, Future Fic
Word count: 28006
Summary: When two teenagers show up in the gateroom and make an astonishing
claim, John must risk everything to get them home, even if it means changing everything that he knows. Set in S5.
Date: September 29, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue
With an opening like that, you had BETTER be continuing this story soon; what you've got here is WAY too intriguing to leave it hanging like that!
Genres: Action & Adventure, Angst, Drama, Episode Prologues & Epilogues, Hurt/Comfort, Smut & Porn
Word count: 29010
Summary: While John is still recovering in treatment from the Iratus bug retrovirus, another incident with Elizabeth leads to long-standing repercussions in their relationship.
Date: February 17, 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2
EXCELLENT work, to say the least.
A bit ambiguous about them being in a relationship BEFORE this happened- it might have been more effective if the retrovirus just made them act on previously-restrained desires rather than make previously-expressed feelings more 'explicit'-, but I can't fault the subsequent exploration of their feelings after the mutation.
After all, what is NOT to find cool about the scale of the bond they develop here; not only do we have John and Elizabeth establishing a psychic link as they're mutating, but Elizabeth's feelings actually 'survive' even when her mutation's practically completed itself and turned her all the way into a QUEEN!
Hope you're planning on writing more stories; if this is an indication of what you're capable of, I have a feeling any other plots you come up with are going to be VERY enjoyable...
Genres: Action & Adventure, Angst, Drama, Hurt/Comfort, Romance
Word count: 29656
Summary: Elizabeth ascends from her Replicator body but after re-taking human form, she lands in the hands of an enemy John has yet to encounter.
Date: May 23, 2013 Title: Chapter 15: Epilogue
One of those ‘Elizabeth Resurrection’ stories that you REALLY wish the producers would do if/when they decide to bring her back; nice job.
The twist of making the villain a relative of Kolya was particularly appreciated; of Atlantis’s ‘individual’ villains- Kolya, Michael, and arguably Todd; Oberoth didn’t really do enough as an individual as he was more of a figurehead for the collective Asuran consciousness rather than doing anything as himself-, Kolya was the one I always found most interesting due to his relatively straightforward nature, and his son definitely continued that tradition.
‘Tricking’ Elizabeth into thinking that she was on their side against the ‘villains’ from Atlantis is one of those twists that’s so simple only someone as ruthlessly demented as Kolya and his progeny would try it, and John’s internal struggle as his hope at the chance of getting Elizabeth back clashes with his fear of losing her again was very well-portrayed, although the moment when John won Elizabeth over by saying that he’d actually ALLOW her to shoot him was definitely dramatic.
The concluding confrontation could have been a bit longer- maybe a scene where John has a chance to shoot Aldran and turns it down, grimly informing the other man that if he WAS the ‘monster’ Aldran’s convinced himself he was, he would have shot him the first chance he had-, but the last couple of chapters as John finally admitted how he feels to Elizabeth worked out very well, neatly reflecting how she gives him the ‘freedom’ to be vulnerable with someone else and returns that ability to be open with comparative ease once their feelings have been shared.
Keep up the good work!
Genres: Episode Prologues & Epilogues
Word count: 35067
Summary: Post-Common Ground fic. In the aftermath of negotiating and nearly losing John's life, Elizabeth finds herself taking action that have long-standing repercussions to their relationship and the entire structure of Atlantis command.
Date: November 13, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Assuming that Elizabeth hasn't apologised to John in the intervening time- and I'm hoping that the next chapter begins with some reference to what their relationship's been like since that night-, I have a feeling that things are about to get VERY complicated...
Date: November 21, 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3
OK, it's official; I REALLY don't know how to feel about this chapter.
On the one hand, John and Elizabeth have made SOME kind of progress at confronting their current personal issues with each other...
On the other hand- to paraphrase "South Park"-, YOU KILLED RODNEY! YOU BASTARD!
I REALLY hope you've got a good twist coming up for the next chapter (Preferably one that saves thekid AND the scientist)...
Date: December 19, 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4
As twists go, that certainly lived up to my expectations, although the fact that they're still being held hostage by the lunatic sisterhood is a bit of a worrying detail; here's hoping that the rest of Atlantis can get them out (And maybe figure out a bit about what motivates this bunch of basket-cases) before things take a turn for the worst...
Genres: Action & Adventure, Angst, Crossover, Drama
Word count: 20079
Summary: Back on Earth, John and Elizabeth find themselves at the centre of a scandal that rips them apart and only New York's bestselling crime writing duo can help bring them together. (SGA/Castle crossover) Set during The Return, but slightly AU in that they never received 'the call' and Elizabeth started seeing everyone after the dinner. Latter half of season 3 for Castle.
Date: October 08, 2011 Title: Chapter 1: Hitting The Fan
So, just to check, this is set during "The Return" while they're on Earth, I assume?
That said, looks interesting so far; I wonder what will happen when Castle and Sheppard meet?
Author's Response: Yes, but more of an AU Return in that Elizabeth started to meet with people after the dinner and they didn't get 'the call', will go add that to the notes :-) Thanks for replying! :-)