The message is good. There's potential.
I agree? Also I wonder why Sheppard wrote the letter in the first place? Be interesting to find out hint, hint!
I agree that this story reads like a great prologue to a longer story. What happened? How did it happen? I think this could be an excellent start to something great.
i dunno...it's your story ;) probably something impossible to get out of and John's only concern was to save his team... maybe you'll think of something... sometimes those plot bunnies just attack
this is a really cute idea. I would like to see more about this story...more of what Elizabeth is feeling and what actually happened to John. Even if making this a short story it feels like there's a lot missing! It's almost like a teaser using the good stuff
Author's Response: Thanks. I dont know maybe i could do a flashback about how he died but I dont know what would be good. What do you think?
Way to think outside the box.
Author's Response: Thanks I try to do things thats not normal for them I think they could possibly do something totally out of the ordinary under so much pain. I like to experiment.