it's a little too fast...the action should be more complicated. But I like the idea of challenge and your’s fic. Keep going
XD It was funny! Please update soon
i like this story! i think he should be gone for a few days its always more dramatic than hours, whats going to happen to him?? are they going to put a tracking device in him?? update soon!!!
Author's Response: ooooooh like that idea i'm sorry I haven't updated but to be perfectly honest I had completely forgot about this story... Seems like I'll be picking it up again.. :P don't know about the tracking device.. I know! how about he gets the tracking device but he doesn't know, so the wraith keep showing up on every single mission until Shep's had enough and goes to Carson and they discover the tracking device.. sorry to be bouncing ideas with you but I haven't got a beta and I was wondering if you'd be interested..?
Great start, but how could you leave us in the middle? Hoping you'll carry on!