I noticed you changed the part with Simon & had Elizabeth break up with Simon instead of vice versa. I suppose that for this story it makes sense. As for "Intruder" since John is the one who saved the day in the episode how will you accomplish it here? I can't see Sumner doing it. I don't think he was even a pilot. Or did he hitch a ride on the Daedalus somehow?
Author's Response: I've got a couple of thoughts about "Intruder", but all I'll say now is that John ISN'T on "Daedalus"; he'd have no idea of the territory there or where to hide, whereas he knows Atlantis better than anyone alive. Glad you liked the part with Simon and Elizabeth; I was a bit worried about that.